Descriptive writing

This week in mamaku 1 we have been writing some descriptive writing using nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs,

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

                                          my story:

One dark and rainy day in the dark and haunted hall of horror.  There was an old and rusty chair the middle of the hall which was in the rusty old apartment, Across the street from my house, and also, There were stairs which were at the other end of the hall and there was someone playing the piano i don't know who it is I think it is a ghost oh oh I better run for my life before it sees me so i went and hid and watched the ghost walk past me and then bang it started raining inside bye the broken window above me . the spray paint started oozing down the wall suddenly I started getting wet bye the window above me it was hailing on me......... there was a drain right in front of me i looked inside of it there was a man in the drain trying to get out so i let him out and he ran away..... i went back home and went into my room which was the garage and studyed about it for school ...........

Self assessment:

Things that i think i have done well is punctuation i have done good descriptive writing i think that i need to work more often to get more work done and that i need to work bye my self more often aswel.

PEAR ASSESSMENT:

I think to do more writing but you did well good job.:)